badluckfairy

March 4, 2011

Did I write that out loud?

Filed under: Writing — by badluckfairy @ 23:45

One of the hardest things about sharing things you’ve written with other people, is once they’ve read it, you can never take it back.

So, if you’ve really poured your life and soul into a piece of writing, you can feel a little exposed.  Well I do anyway.

One of my short stories, ‘Hope’ is actually kind of about me.  Not directly, and certainly not all of it.  I didn’t realise it in any way involved me other than obviously as the writer.

As I’ve managed to find a copy online, I’m going to share an excerpt with you.

I’d like to take this opportunity to say that I have never been in a physically violent relationship.  Most of this story is fiction with a few things that I have felt or experienced written in there too.

Before her birth, Hope had been an innocent. Blissfully unaware of the tempestuous environment that awaited her outside her warm safe cocoon.
Her Mother wasn’t a religious woman, but she prayed everyday. She prayed that her baby would stay safe inside her womb for as long as possible. Not just for her unborn child’s safety. You see, her child’s Father had promised not to lay a finger on her whilst she was with child.
Callie knew he wasn’t right for her, knew it was only a matter of time before the blind rage he possessed raised it’s ugly head. It would push her back into the routine of fear and loathing that had calmed while she was carrying his child.
And what of the child? He had threatened to take the baby once it was born, to stop her from seeing her child, had threatened her life if she tried to stop him from doing it.
His idea of family life changed on a daily basis. One day he would smile as he spoke of taking their child to the park, pushing the chubby little baby on a swing as the 3 of them laughed together in the sunshine before sitting down to a picnic as the sun set.
The next day he would scream and cry, telling Callie she only had rights to the child whilst the umbilical cord still served it’s purpose.

Rae Helson 2004

 

I’d really like some feedback on the above before I even consider posting anymore of it.

And on that note, I’ll bid you goodnight.

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